Avoiding -ING Verbs: A Guide for Fiction Writers
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Understanding Verb Types
In the realm of writing, especially fiction, the choice of verbs can significantly impact the quality of your prose. As both a writing instructor and an editor, I often find myself replacing verbs that end in -ing with more direct past or present tense forms. This practice not only enhances my writing but also benefits my students.
To begin, let’s categorize the types of verbs:
- Action Verbs: These verbs convey specific actions, such as "run," "ran," and "running."
- Linking Verbs: These connect the subject to additional information in the sentence. The most common linking verb is some form of "to be." For instance, "He is a runner."
- Auxiliary Verbs: Commonly referred to as helping verbs, these typically accompany action verbs, providing context or tense. An example would be "She was running."
The focus of this discussion is on the auxiliary verbs coupled with the -ing forms of action verbs.
The Case Against -ING Verbs
It's not that I dislike -ing verbs; they serve their purpose. However, I often emphasize that in most cases, opting for the regular past or present tense of an action verb results in stronger writing.
Consider this: when you use "to be" combined with an -ing verb, it creates a sense of distance. For instance, picture a scene on the beach. You might write:
"A woman ran past me on the beach."
This sentence feels complete and immerses the reader in the moment. In contrast, if you write:
"A woman was running past me on the beach."
This version feels less immediate. It suggests a narrative recounting rather than a direct experience, as if someone is recalling a memory over coffee.
To illustrate this further, think of a sports commentator. Their descriptions create distance from the action, which is not the aim in fiction.
Tightening Your Prose
Most of the time, tighter sentences translate to stronger writing. Let’s compare two similar sentences:
- "A woman ran past me on the beach, kicking sand in her wake."
- "A woman was running past me on the beach, kicking sand in her wake."
While both convey similar ideas, the second sentence feels bulkier due to the added auxiliary verb.
You can also rephrase the sentences for clarity:
- "A woman ran past me on the beach and kicked sand in her wake."
- "A woman was running past me on the beach and was kicking sand in her wake."
The latter version requires an auxiliary verb for the second action, further stretching the sentence and weakening its impact.
Action Steps for Writers
Search through your manuscript for any -ing verbs connected to an auxiliary verb. While it's impossible to eliminate all -ing verbs, transforming those that are linked to "to be" can significantly enhance your writing. This adjustment sharpens the focus and brings your reader closer to the action.
Enhancing Your Writing Skills
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About the Author
Shaunta Grimes is an accomplished writer and educator residing in Northwestern PA. She juggles her life with her husband, three remarkable children, a dog named King Louie Baloo, and a cat named Ollie Wilbur. Shaunta is the author of several works, including "Viral Nation" and "Rebel Nation". She also runs a Substack newsletter titled "Then See What Happens".